Friday 19 October 2018

creative writing

In term 4 week 1 We have been Doing a tumble one of them were writing.We had to write about five different pictures,A insect,bush,roollercoaster ride,Temple and water fight.I wrote about four but here is my favourite.





(Start here)It’s a bright day in a forest and people are hiking,They want to catch some food to eat So they went  to the lake and tried to catch some fish.They could not catch one,but suddenly the saw a deer run through the bushes and trees the hikers tried to chase the deer but it was to fast jumping with his four legs.Suddenly the deer went inside this door and escaped through the exit.The hikers came inside they could smell this rotten food running through their nose some hikers ran out far to get some fresh air but a group of hikers were brave to smell  this rotten food
continue) The group of hikers hid behind the leader saying
what was that strange noise ? the leader said its its its a wild bunny the hikers
came out of behind and said we knew that was not something scary.They were
wondering what this place was but one said look at that big branch doing on top
of the entrance door i don’t know, one of the hikers said This house is old and
rusty and another one said it’s a temple. Rocks were on the floor and brown
dusty dirt  was smoking out dirty air.This place smells horrible it’s like the smell
of my grandma and the hiker said you can say that again.I can hear the rocks
from the top rushing and rumbling down with the herd of rocks below them.
The rocks are grey and hard and trees are above the entrance door to.It looked
like it was a secret thing about someone's secret passage.They discovered the
place out but what could be inside.They found this button but what could it do
one of the hikers went flying in the air because the floor from below had a spring
 They found another button it made a tiger come out of the cage and two hikers
came running buy out of the temple Another button came  and it made a hole for
a hiker to drop the lid closed The last five hikers were left with the leader they
found a button and the five hikers went in this room and bars came to cover them
from the room and they were stuck.What could happen to the leader.The leader
shook with fear and ran outside with the other hikers the leader said go in all
seven of you.They went inside and  two hikers got chased by a lion and a
panther.One of the hikers got chained up and got to the side.three of the hikers
got blocked by guards and couldn’t escape.there was one hiker left that  stuck to
a chair with his hand behind and his mouth taped So it was only the leader left.
He ran through the bushes and dashed home as fast as he could leaving the
hikers behind
This was my favourite because it was descriptive

2 comments:

  1. Hi, I am Chloe from Awahono School. I like how you have two paragraphs and put a picture in the middle to separate them. Maybe next time you should tell us about the picture.

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